Email is becoming a major—and in some places the
preferred—mode of business communication. It is quick and very easy to use, and
there is still something about it that feels rather informal. It doesn’t feel
like writing a formal letter with heavy bond letterhead, matching envelope and
hand-written signature. However, don’t let that lingering casual feeling fool
you into thinking that you can get sloppy with your business emails. This is
where first impressions are often made and where business relationships can be
made or broken.
Consider the following exchange. This was an actual
correspondence between an artist (J) and the art organizer of a big musical
event (D) who also happens to be a professor at a major American art school.
For legal reasons, the names have been reduced to their initials and the name
of the event has been removed. The artist is trying to get information on
entering a piece (a banner) for consideration for the event:
Hi D,
Two quick questions about the Banners. 1.) Is there any limit to the number of
images we can submit? (I know last year it was three.) and 2.) If I'm from out
of town, I can just email my image or do I have to mail it?
-J
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Hi J,
no limit on images. also, you could email me the preliminary images as long as
you also fill out an image list with all of the info. I am not sure if the lage
file images will go through the server though. maybe through u send it??
best,
D
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are you going to enter
again this year??!
D
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I was planning on it.
Is there something in the fine print that says I'm not allowed to?
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NO, please do!!
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Hi D,
Here are my email sized submissions for the exhibition along with the required
info. Let me know if any of the images are selected and I will send the full
size versions. Also, let me know if you need anything else.
Thanks,
J
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(A week goes by with
no response from D)
Hi D,
Just wondering when we could expect to hear back as to whether we got into the
Contest or not.
Thanks,
J
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very soon!
best.
How many times have we had a correspondence like this one,
where one side is obviously trying to do business in a reasonably businesslike
way and the other side is responding as if they are texting their pal about
going out somewhere? The feeling that our artist had was one of being
dismissed. He was communicating with a high-ranking art professor, someone of
great education, professional respect and responsibility and he made his emails
to her as concise and professional as he could. Her responses were anything but
professional.
Where D Went Wrong
There are three things that stand out in any communication
more than anything else: grammar, spelling and proper mechanics
(capitalization, punctuation, etc.). You demonstrate your own professionalism
and maintain your own credibility when your communications are free from
obvious errors. Aside from a single use for emphasis, D uses no capital letters
at all. Her entire communication is conducted in low case, which is fine for
programming but looks terrible for professional communication. Add in the
spelling and grammatical errors as well as D’s penchant for multiple
punctuation marks at the end of her sentence fragments and it is no wonder that
J was feeling a bit dismissed.
D had chosen to communicate with him in the most
unprofessional way she could short of cursing, which demonstrates a certain
arrogant disdain on her part for our poor artist. If you don’t think that these
things come through in the way you communicate with people, think about it some
more. I say chosen because she actually works on a number of boards for a
number of organizations. If this was how she communicated with everyone, she
wouldn’t be there. This, therefore, had to be her conscious choice.
Crafting a Proper email
Correspondence
Perhaps the way D treated J works in the world of academe,
where arrogance and tenure go hand-in-hand, reputation trumps history and
results are purely subjective; but in the practical world of business, where
the bottom line is the final, objective judge of all actions and decisions,
such an exchange would have resulted in D’s discipline or even dismissal.
Why? Because it not only puts the writer, D, in a bad light,
it also puts the company in a bad light. Dealing with people like that hurts
the reputation of the business, hurts its brand and so makes it more difficult
to compete. There are, however, some simple rules you can follow that will keep
this sort of thing from happening to your company.
Keep it Professional
Your goal here is to make your communication clear and
credible. Make sure your email address is informative and not “cute” or
“suggestive.” Something like hotlips69
or iamironman is just not suitable
for business. Your personal mySpace page, fine; your accountancy practice, no.
What’s more, you don’t want to use abbreviations—yes, take the time to write
everything out—and you don’t want to use emoticons (the little animated smiley
faces). They are not cute or funny. They are annoying and they distract the
reader from your message. Finally, avoid jargon unless you are communicating
with someone very familiar with it.
Keep it Grammatical
Proofread your email before sending it and if it is long,
have someone else proofread it as well. Two sets of eyes are always better than
one. Also, proofread it outloud. Your ear will catch mistakes that your eye
will miss. Make sure your sentences are, in fact, sentences, that your words
are spelled correctly and that your punctuation is right. After all, nothing stands
out more clearly—or destroys your credibility faster—than a poorly constructed
message.
Keep it Concise
The old writer’s advice is, if you can say it in a
paragraph, say it in a sentence. Being concise is not simply writing short,
choppy sentences. It really means writing no more than you have to in order to
get the point across. So, before writing you need to know what you want to say.
Then, when you write, say it and clearly and succinctly as possible, but
remember to include all the pertinent details and information needed for the reader
to understand your point. This said, you also need to mind your tone. You want
to avoid coming across as demanding, curt or demeaning. The tone you are
looking for is one that makes you seem friendly and approachable but also
respectful.
Keep it Polite
Use please and thank you and unless you are on a first
name basis with your correspondent, address the person you are communicating
with by their correct title or honorific; Mrs. Jones, or Judge Smith. Also,
considering the threat of malware, you don’t want to send an attachment until
you have either been invited to do so or you have cleared it with the person
you are sending it to. When you do get permission, make sure that the
attachment is not too large for your recipient’s email system to handle and
that the files are in the right format for your recipient to open.
The Bottom Line
Your email is your business’ voice and for it to serve you
effectively, it has to be clear, the message concise and informative, and the
tone pleasing to the reader. Terse, poorly constructed messages send warnings
against doing business with this company rather than the information they were
supposed to convey. Protect yourself from the willful mistakes that D made by
following the rules of good email communications and by making sure the TO:
line on your email is blank until you are done crafting your message. It’s the
last line of defense against sending an email before it’s ready. Your brand
name will thank you.
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Monday, August 04, 2008 at 4:30 PM
anonymous says:
Before you hit send on that next email, perhaps you should run down this list, just to be sure:
1. Is it going to just one person? (If yes, jump to #10)
2. Since it's going to a group, have I thought about who is on my list?
3. Are they blind copied?
4. Did every person on the list really and truly opt in? Not like sort of, but really ask for it?
5. So that means that if I didn't send it to them, they'd complain about not getting it?
6. See #5. If they wouldn't complain, take them off!
7. That means, for example, that sending bulk email to a list of bloggers just cause they have blogs is not okay.
8. Aside: the definition of permission marketing: Anticipated, personal and relevant messages delivered to people who actually want to get them. Nowhere does it say anything about you and your needs as a sender. Probably none of my business, but I'm just letting you know how I feel. (And how your prospects feel).
9. Is the email from a real person? If it is, will hitting reply get a note back to that person? (if not, change it please).
10. Have I corresponded with this person before?
11. Really? They've written back? (if no, reconsider email).
12. If it is a cold-call email, and I'm sure it's welcome, and I'm sure it's not spam, then don't apologize. If I need to apologize, then yes, it's spam, and I'll get the brand-hurt I deserve.
13. Am I angry? (If so, save as draft and come back to the note in one hour).
14. Could I do this note better with a phone call?
15. Am I blind-ccing my boss? If so, what will happen if the recipient finds out?
16. Is there anything in this email I don't want the attorney general, the media or my boss seeing? (If so, hit delete).
17. Is any portion of the email in all caps? (If so, consider changing it.)
18. Is it in black type at a normal size?
19. Do I have my contact info at the bottom? (If not, consider adding it).
20. Have I included the line, "Please save the planet. Don't print this email"? (If so, please delete the line and consider a job as a forest ranger or flight attendant).
21. Could this email be shorter?
22. Is there anyone copied on this email who could be left off the list?
23. Have I attached any files that are very big? (If so, google something like 'send big files' and consider your options.)
24. Have I attached any files that would work better in PDF format?
25. Are there any :-) or other emoticons involved? (If so, reconsider).
26. Am I forwarding someone else's mail? (If so, will they be happy when they find out?)
27. Am I forwarding something about religion (mine or someone else's)? (If so, delete).
28. Am I forwarding something about a virus or worldwide charity effort or other potential hoax? (If so, visit snopes and check to see if it's 'actually true).
29. Did I hit 'reply all'? If so, am I glad I did? Does every person on the list need to see it?
30. Am I quoting back the original text in a helpful way? (Sending an email that says, in its entirety, "yes," is not helpful).
31. If this email is to someone like Seth, did I check to make sure I know the difference between its and it's? Just wondering.
32. If this is a press release, am I really sure that the recipient is going to be delighted to get it? Or am I taking advantage of the asymmetrical nature of email--free to send, expensive investment of time to read or delete?
33. Are there any little animated creatures in the footer of this email? Adorable kittens? Endangered species of any kind?
34. Bonus: Is there a long legal disclaimer at the bottom of my email? Why?
35. Bonus: Does the subject line make it easy to understand what's to come and likely it will get filed properly?
36. If I had to pay 42 cents to send this email, would I?